Drawing 1 - Assignment 2 - Tutor feedback

Overall Comments

Your drawing is improving, and it is clear that you are beginning to look at the world around you more closely. Think about the negative spaces in between objects this will help you to ‘map' out your drawing more efficiently. Well done.

There is a tendency to only commit to the minimal amount prescribed in the handbook- the handbook is only a starting point, be as thorough as you can at this stage and you will reap the benefits later on. Learning to draw is similar to learning to play the piano. Practice is the key, so I re-iterate from your last feedback ‘More quick sketches are needed before deciding on the final composition. Practice drawing through making small quick studies of the objects or subjects'.

The placements on the page/compositions are unimaginative and I feel you could enjoy all of the exercises more if you aim to pursue the subjects inventively, imaginatively and thoroughly. This is where the preparatory work will come into it's own.

Where I have advised you to re-address certain issues within your work please go back over the works, this is normal practice for any artist at any level and it is about working reflectively and reflexively.

Please write clearly the name of the exercises on the back of the work.

Feedback on assignment Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity


The composition of this work is improved in comparison to the other works, it is clear that you have really thought about the approach that you would take and it is a more successful outcome because of it.

Although the composition works, the preparatory work for this image, although better are still rather scant and you could have done with more basic drawings. If you had done this you would have discovered more about the materials that you were working with, in turn this would have led to revelations about how you could have got more out of the texture of the prickles, particularly the yellow ones on the right hand side. Your explorations with the mediums are starting to happen, develop this practice further for your next assignment.

There are the start of some good basic techniques, such as the light and dark on the left hand side cactus and the more rubbery ‘feel' that you have induced. Overall a steady improvement, well done.

Flowers in a cup

This work needs to be closely thought about and worked on further to develop it. The idea and the composition are interesting but the line work and colour pencil work seems hasty and less considered. Think about what you may edit out to make it more interesting. The flowers need more definition, you are starting to develop the folds of the tulips but you need to push yourself further. The cup is askew, the handle disappearing into the table. All a bit rushed and I am sure you can do better. Don't draw one object in isolation, instead work across the subjects so that you build up the drawing by working in one area then moving to a contrasting section next to it and so on until you have built the drawing up.

I would advise you to work over the top of this drawing to resolve it in line with my comments. Look at examples of contemporary drawing practice as well as historical to help you.

Line detail. Fine liner pen (shell)

These quick drawings are more successful and confident, I would have expected more sketches perhaps thinking about size and scale, this is the start of an observational enquiry and I was pleased to see you turning the shell round, over etc in order to change your view. The line is fairly confident and informative, could more have been achieved with the shell surface?

Group exercise.

This is looser and has some interesting mark making, although the overall image is rather confused and difficult to read. The area that achieves the best result is the right hand lower side. The horizon is odd as is the background, although I can see that you have abstracted some shapes from what I imagine to be curtain folds, which is an imaginative step forward.

Texture is important to understand our visual world, it is appropriate for all drawing and an illusion of texture can be produced through mark making.

Single shell

The form of the shell is well drawn, and there is the start of some decent tonal work, although the range of tone is rather limited. To improve upon this you can make a tonal scale using your pencils that runs from the lightest tone that you can get out of the lead, to the darkest- you will see how pressure informs the darks as well as the lights. The shell at present suffers from similar tonal values across the form, you could work into this with a rubber, taking back some areas and re-instating them if necessary.

The placement on the page is unimaginative and I feel you could enjoy all of the exercises more if you aim to pursue the subject inventively, imaginatively and thoroughly. This is where the preparatory work will come into it's own.

Fish on a plate

There is a small sketch within your sketchbook but no larger work, which is a shame as it looks as if this may have developed into a good drawing. Again more investigation of the subject needed. This project is testing in as much as it challenges you to get a particularly lifeless, heavy feeling to the dead fish, which you could have been successful in achieving if you had developed it further.

Grabbing the chance.

Look at the spontaneity of the sketches and try to replicate this at a larger scale, using lively mark making. Look at the animals (some imaginary) within Paula Rego's drawings or Henry Moore's sketchbook for ideas. Again there is no definitive singular work that has come out of this investigation, however you are investigating your subject more.

Sketchbooks Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

This is developing much better, but you can really extend yourself within the pages of your sketchbook further than you have already achieved. It is a place where testing, colour work, experimental drawings all can happen- they will really help your development into an artist. I re-iterate from your last feedback- You would benefit from working with small studies/partial studies to try out techniques - this will help you with the decision making process. Try out a variety of compositions of the same scene in this way also. Look at the OCA website for other student artists sketchbooks, it can be very informative.

Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays Context

I haven't caught sight of your learning log this assignment. You need to indicate where I might find it within your assignment details.

In your last assignment, you had begun a visual exploration and this carries through your learning log. The way you write about what you see was clear, simple and honest, as you think about works also think about how they relate back to your drawing, your mark, your view…

I trust that you will continue with this and I will look forward to seeing it next time.

Suggested reading/viewing Context

Dexter, E (2010) Vitamin D: New Perspectives in Drawing Phaidon Press

Downs, et al (2007) Drawing Now: Between the Lines of Contemporary Art I.B.Tauris

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Pointers for the next assignment

Please complete the assignments in full as they are designed to help you progress rigorously. Please indicate your exercises clearly on the reverse side. Really commit to each exercise to get the most out of it, be as imaginative as you can.

As you move into the next assignment, take into account, size, scale and material/medium making them all a very conscious choice. Look at other artists to enable a wider dialogue with the visual arts to happen within your practice.

Assessment potential

I understand your aim is to go for the Painting or Creative Arts Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to succeed at assessment. However, in order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.

You will also have to re-work some works so as to improve upon them.

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